Thursday, October 11, 2012

I'm going to take a step away.

I have love all the feedback and only hope the feedback I provided was helpful.  I am going to visit my son at college this weekend so will be out of the loop for a few I think it is a good opportunity to step away and let the query simmer.

Dear Agent,
Being an orphan sucked.  Eighteen year old Emma Hunter had been tossed from one group home to the next her entire life.   She longs for someone who cares, or at least someone who would have  told her she was entrusted with the powers of a malevolent spirit and he'll do anything to get them back.

Emma’s life is far from perfect.  The system had made sure of that.  If living in a residential group home wasn’t bad enough, her love for the bad boy of the school, Luke, solidifies her place as an outcast.  Growing up without parents had been tough, but even Emma knows love isn’t controlling or jealous.  When a boy who flirts with her is killed, Emma knows  Luke had to have been involved.

Pulled into a world of Native American legend, Emma’s powers of telepathy begin to emerge.   Able to hear the thoughts of those around her would be an advantage in this fight, that is if Luke wasn’t able to block her.  As her powers grow stronger she learns Luke is a Skinwalker—a witch who alters his shape to wreak havoc on humans.  Disguised as a raven, Luke watches, waiting until Emma turns nineteen so he can reclaim the powers that are rightfully his, even if it means killing everyone in his way.  When Emma meets Solomon, a young medicine man, he offers her protection. But knowing what happened to the last person she befriended, she pushes Solomon away.  When the connection with Solomon becomes too strong Emma knows she can’t turn her back on her first chance at love.  She must learn to use the powers she’s been entrusted to defeat Luke or risk losing Solomon's love.   IT’S YOU is a NA Romance, that tells the story of healing, with a supernatural thread driving the story.  It is complete at 96,000 words.

 Thank you for your time and consideration

1 comment:

  1. I only read the prologue in keep with first page. I will tell you I was sucked in. So good job. I'd definitely move to chapter one. Does it need some smoothing out? Sure. But the hook is there. Good job.